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The wood

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The wood

“there is something in this wood”, he told me.
“something full of baby magic.”
Back then, I didn’t believe him really
for who’d have thought this wood would have it?
That this wood would have evergreen
everlasting baby magic?

Back then, I was a small child you see,
The exact age, I can’t remember,
and in those fields of ripe, lush evergreen
I’d spend my long Septembers,
Wondering if anyone could see
the summer’s dying embers.

It was back when Innocence was free
that I met fairies, and fawns,
when none could sever me from dreams,
that I believed in nymphs of dawn
that came in the morning to streak the sky
With the gold rays they would draw.

the stag would come and play with me, and let
me ride his back, Oh, how I’d smile
back then, back then, how could I forget?
the way he’d lead me for a while
through the enchanted forest
of which I am now exiled.

Oh elves, I really wish you’d come to me
again, like when I was younger.
When I’d drink the honey’s nectar, and cease
my rumbling childish hunger
If I ask aloud, would the fairies come
and make me once more, younger?
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This is an interesting piece, it tells a story most of us are familiar with. Of course, being so familiar, it loses some originality, but then again, I've always been of the belief that nothing is truly original, lest you make up your own words.

But there is an unevenness to it. The first stanza plays hard one repetition and and similar sounds, it is, in a way, more hesitant than the rest. It's lingering in place, savoring the taste of that lost time, whereas the rest of the poem seems to wanna tell the whole story right away.

Still, I must say that the third stanza is my favorite of the five presented, it has varying imagery and deep-set emotional values of innocence and a childs precious curiosity and imagination.

Still, I would like to highlight something form the stanza before it:

"Wondering if anyone could see
the summer’s dying embers."

Because I do too wonder this, as much as I wonder, if anyone has an answer.